Its weird, but what I thought if when reading that was my creative writing teacher telling us not to say 'she said' but to vary it .
Heres how the old hag who taught me at school would have edited it :
''After each classmate was allowed to say what they didn't like about Alex the teacher said they were going to take a vote, Barton said. They said he was "disgusting" and "annoying," Barton EXCLAIMED.
"He was incredibly upset," she SHOUTED. "The only friend he has ever made in his life was forced to do this."
By a 14 to 2 margin, the students voted him out of the class.
Barton, who MENTIONED she is considering legal action, INFORMED US Alex began the testing process in February for an official diagnosis under the suggestion of Morningside Principal Marsha Cully.
Alex has had disciplinary issues because of his disabilities, Barton POINTED OUT. The school and district has met with Barton and her son to create an individual education plan, she MURMERED. A veteran of 12 years of teaching, including nine at Morningside, Portillo has attended these meetings, she COMMENTED.
Barton said after the vote, Alex's teacher asked him how he felt.
"He CRIED, 'I feel sad,'" she MUTTERED. ''
I would seriously have been graded badly for poor vocabulary for using said so often lol .
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And I'm not going to automatically dismiss the concept of having the students of a class each say something about the student in question as a means of showing that student why what he did was wrong. It's a valid teaching method.
Have you ever been around a five-year old (and I mean as an adult, don't give me any bullsh*t about your kid sister or talk about back when you were 5)?
They talk a lot of nonsense, sprinkled with some brutal honesty, and they have a very basic understanding of emotions (mad, sad, happy). That's the whole reason you have an *adult* in the classroom, and don't just toss them into a Lord of the Flies scenario where they're asked but not competent enough to make decisions that have lasting impact on themselves and others.
This teacher not only squandered an opportunity to model appropriate behavior, but crossed the line into endorsing bullying, which the child she was targeting was not old enough to deflect, understand or even learn from. It accomplished *nothing* except making an already isolated, troubled child feel even more alienated and rejected at an age where group acceptance is paramount to a healthy self-identity.
Edited, May 30th 2008 9:52pm by Atomicflea
Its weird, but what I thought if when reading that was my creative writing teacher telling us not to say 'she said' but to vary it .
Really? Because, to me, nothing screams "Bad Writing!" Like seeing dialog written that way.
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