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In this essay, I will attempt to look beyond these relativistic factors. I will argue that any person seeking euthanasia to relieve their own pain and suffering is not in a clear state of mind, and therefore unable to make a coherent, rational decision regarding their current state of life, and the conditions of their death. This essay will focus on the specific case of voluntary euthanasia, so all other cases will be ignored for the sake of argument.
While there's nothing glaring wrong with the rest of your essay (from a purely writing-based standpoint), this particular part raises alarms in my head. One of the things I've been taught ever since 4th grade is to not use "I" in an essay. Whether or not this is simply bias taught from youth or actual writing technique, I don't know. If you're making an essay arguing a certain standpoint, you want to make your thesis definitive. Instead of saying, "I will argue that any person...", say, "One can see that any person..." Right there is the point you are trying to prove for the entire essay. Putting in the "I will argue" makes it seem like a cop-out for inserting a clear, concise, and easily identifiable thesis within the rest of the beginning text.
Edited, Feb 13th 2007 11:39pm by DodoBird