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had to write this story for some class i got a B on it just wanted to see what u guys though of it.
It all started like any other day; well any other day for a guy like D. He was hot on a vampire’s trail. When he caught up to him, the vampire pulled out a strange book, and then every thing turned purple then he couldn’t see anything. Then he slipped into darkness. When he got up, he found he had two scimitars pointed at him. D looked up and thought to himself, "What did I get myself into this time?" D saw that the guy holding the scimitars was a dark elf.

The dark elf slowly backed away and said in his dark elf language, "What are you doing in my camp? This is no place for a human. There are dangers around here you can’t start to imagine. Be gone from this place while you still have your life!" D knew the dark elf language well from his many trails around the world but something was strange. The dark elf let him live, and this dark elf was a bit different in looks than the ones he’s used to hunting and getting information from. So he thought he needed to find out more about this dark elf.

"I’m sorry dark elf. I was on a vampire hunt when he used a book to send me to this place. If you tell me who you are, and where I am, I might be on my way," D said.

"You are in the Icewind Dales and I am Drizzt Do’Urden. Now when I look at you I see you are no normal human. Who and what are you? What is a vampire?" Drizzt asked.

D had a bit to think about. What kind of dark elf has not heard of vampires and not see him as a half vampire? He thought about not telling the dark elf (that calls him self Drizzt) too much. Maybe he’s just testing him to see if he is the famous vampire hunter D. So he said, " You are right I’m not all human only half, but you should know that we half vampires and Dark Elf’s are allies. So tell me more about this Icewind Dale."

Drizzt responded by saying, " I have never heard of such things as vampires and we Dark Elf’s have few allies, and I would know of vampires being allies with us. The Ice Wind Dales is the farthest north you can get. You said something about a vampire sending you here by a book?"

" I don’t know much about it. All I know is I almost had him I was going in for the final blow when he pulled out a book and it sucked me here," D said.

" I see. Well I think that book is some kind of magical item that sends you to different planes, because in this plane there are no vampires." Drizzt said.

"Maybe, but how do I get back to my plane?" D said.

"I’m not sure about that. I can ask around, but I would suggest not saying you’re a vampire, it may cause unwanted notice. But your timing couldn’t have come at a better time. The barbarians that run around in this Icewind Dale are planing on attacking ten towns. Ten towns are ten cites that I guard. Please help me defend them."

"If you help me find my way home to my plane then I guess I would owe it to you to help you with this fight. How many are we talking about, and how long will this be?"

"Many. Every tribe in Icewind Dale is coming to attack it. I wouldn’t have an idea how long. We will need to try and get the dwarves here to help out I’m friends with the king so I’m sure they will help."

"Ok, you go talk to the king and get their help I will look around and see what kind of land we will be dealing with," D said. P.2

"Ok. I'm not sure how long I will be. I will find you when I'm done," Drizzt said while running off to the kingdom of the dwarves.

"Let’s see what we can find in this ice land," D thought to himself while setting off to have a look around the Dales. While he was walking in the snow that went up half way to his legs, he was about to pass a giant rock, which he thought he could hide behind and take out a few guys. All of a sudden an ice giant jumped out behind the rock with an earth shattering growl. D jumped back and drew out his sword ready for some fun.

"I don’t know what you think you can do to me, but you're about to have another hole to growl from," D said while charging in sword at his side drawn and ready to tear into some giant flesh. Then out of no where a dwarf came out, and jumped on to the giant with his axe drawn. He thrusts down on the giant and chopped him in half at his waist and then jumped off.

"I thought you needed some help there. You’re D, aren't you? Drizzt thought maybe you needed some help," the dwarf said while putting back his axe.

"Yes I'm D, but I didn’t need help. You must be the king," D said while putting back his sword.

"Let’s head back to the dark elf, and find out how we are going to beat those over- grown giants, and by the way I'm Breunor King of Clan Battlehammer," The king said.

So they walked a bit till they found Drizzt talking to a big human.

"Ah, there's Wulfgar the barbarian that informed us of that attack. I've trained him me self. So we have no reason to think he's not be telling us the truth. That’s the hammer I made for him. The best thing I will ever make almost took me life when making that," The King of Dwarves said with pride of the hammer and the boy. P.3

"That is a fine weapon he has. How does one almost die from crafting such a fine weapon though?" D asked.

"I spent so much time on it without any rest, or food, or water that I was on the verge of passing out when I crafted that hammer. When I got it done, I passed out from sheer exhaustion. The dark elf met me down the trail when I did get back up, and gave me some food and water to help relive me. It was all worth it to make such a mighty hammer like that one. Its name is Aegis-fang." By this time they reached Drizzt and Wulfgar.

"Ah, there’s Vampire Hunter D and the king. We were just talking about our plans with the fight," Drizzt said when the two walked up.

"It’s nice to meet you D. Breunor. Good to see you again," Wulfgar said to the two.

"So what have we came up with?" Breunor asked.

"We have watched and learned much from the giants. We think they aren’t very good fighters. That they are just planing on using their great size to over power ten towns. They don’t believe us that there is an attack on the way, so they won’t be much help. We well have to have the dwarves take them all on, and of course D and I," Drizzt said.

"Sounds good enough for me. Those over grown giants won’t be much trouble for Clan Battle Hammer!" Breunors said with much pride.

"Yeah, best we can do. I will be right there by your side Breunor," said Wulfgar.

"So when are the barbarians coming to attack?" D asked.

"We aren’t sure yet. Can be any time from a hour to the next three days." Drizzt said. P.4

P.5

"I’ll go get the guys ready till then. We will be ready within two hours," Breunor said while running off to his underground home.

"Well, I think the rest of us should rest up till the big fight," Drizzt said.

"Sure," said both D and Wulfgar at the same time. Then they set off for the cave Drizzt lives in.

" Get up there attacking now!" Drizzt was shouting when D woke up. He saw Drizzt running down a hill. He followed and saw down the hill was a giant field of ice. There were dwarf and barbarians all over the field in combat. So D ran down the hill as fast as he could. He ran up to the closest barbarian he could find and started fighting him. He killed him in one hit, cut him right in half at the waist.

He looked over at Drizzt and saw a dance of death while he took on three guys at once, and cut them all down at once at the necks. D now saw why his two friends looked up at him with pride, but he didn’t have much time to think of that. He ran for some more fights, and he ran into two barbarians.

He started fighting them both parrying each hit with their clubs or giant hammers they each had, with a counter with his own katana. He got bored toying with them, so he took one out with a stab at the neck. He dropped down fast. D looked around for more blood.

That’s when he saw Wulfgar fighting with his giant hammer. Swinging it around killing five people at once. That’s when he saw his own death. He was watching the friends fighting that he didn’t see the giant rushing him. He cursed himself for being careless. He did what he could in the second he had before the giant man came for him to get ready for his defenses. Suddenly he saw the purple light again, and the light blinded him. The last image he saw, before he got knocked out, was Drizzt coming to help him.

Then he woke up, and saw that there was no snow no ice no battle. All he could see were grass hills and a river. He soon realized that he was back on his home plane. He wondered if he just dreamt the whole thing, but he looked down at his blade and saw blood. Human blood. Then he knew it was no dream. It was for real. P.6
-evilcaster

did you even read it? its base off two things a book series about Drizzt Do'Urden. as you saw in the story if you read it. the other is the movie vampire hunter d the main character in the book. I guess some say its a game to I dont know ive never seen or heard of it. those two books you said has nothing at all to do with this story. if you were even half a fan of ether of these you would know. I know I asked what you guys thought but come on that made no sense. If it was even close to basing off those storys my teacher would of failed me as you saw in the post i got a B on it.

Have you ever read "Alice's Adventures in Wonderland" or "Through the Looking-Glass"? There is a reason why Lewis Carroll is still required reading in University-level literature classes today. I read your story.



And there are new things under the sun fortunately. That is why there is still a Nobel Prize for literature...

If there are no original ideas, only modifications to those that have always existed, then what serves as the foundation for the modifications. What idea or ideas can always exist as such, but not be original ideas? Your statement is absurd.

If you truly believe that there is only modification to previous thought, then I feel terribly sorry for you. What a crushing blow you have dealt to the human imagination with your myopic insight. As long as humanity retains its fundamental capacity for curiosity, we are free to be continually entertained by our own unique gift of creativity.

Edited, Thu Oct 13 21:30:24 2005 by galapagosiananna

Edited, Thu Oct 13 21:31:18 2005 by galapagosiananna

I look at my orginal response. Maybe it is my point of view, but I see more of an observation than a criticism. One that has yet to be unproven. I merely made the observation that the basic premise of his story has been done already by Lewis Carroll. If I can be proved wrong, then I will resign my position.

I don't criticize, I observe and then challenge.



Ambiguity: the paper sword of intellectual defense...

My questions:

I still don't understand "all-things like mindedly." Can you unpack that for me? What are these "all things" and in what way do I apparently "desire" them? From what does this desire arise?How is my desire "like mided"? To whom is it "like minded"?

(Obviously not women, by your standards...)



What is this "same thing"? How can something be the "same thing" but in different forms?



"Often" hmmm... Strange word indeed...

How is it creation if it is reducible to replication of the creation of other? That would not be creation; this is more like production or, if you like, re-production. You quoted the Bible earlier, so I am at least able to grant that you have some familiarity with it. If so, you must understand the radical difference between creation and production.

I hope by everything holy you haven't been reading Aristotle previous to your posts. It sounds like you are making subtle nods to his metaphysics, but have unfortunately missed the point completely...



Too late for that...

Im not even going to waste my time... you need to up your medication bro lol.

One thing I think everyone should understand: The OP has a very active imagination. If he was able to channel such an imagination into a more creative work, (and perhaps structurally refine his grammar a bit) I have no doubt that this B paper would be an A paper. If the OP was determined enough to put significantly more work into his writing, I have no doubt even that he could possibly author a book someday. Why be settled with the work that you produced? Why look upon it and simply ponder its value. Its good, but I don't believe it is expressive of the OP's full potential.

I just don't understand how making a valid argument and acknowledging the inherent value of reading classic literature deserves being rated-down.

Well, nonetheless, do me a favor, evilcaster, read more classic literature. With the subject-matter of your paper, I would even suggest reading the Iliad and the Oddessey. You seem to be capable of much more creative writing, but you are content with your work as it is. Don't be. Don't ever settle. Work on the paper more. Re-write it even. Once you do, bring it back to your teacher and ask him/her for more constructive input. Then, re-write it once more. If you are even midly upset at receiving a grade of B, find out what type of work would desrve an A. Find what it is that can seperate your story from the stories of the past: what makes your characters unique; what storyline will keep your readers in suspense throughout the paper; what twist you can offer which will make your story enjoyable to your target audience.

Many stories are good, but do read them because they are good. Fewer stories are great; and those are the ones people remember.